lol... sorry dude idk man, my friend did a rap to this beat too, it was sick (literally), but that is not what I am here for.
It is more like you are just making statement after statement, not flowing. The chorus sounds alright. You have gun shot effects through the whole songs, but talk about making a sweater and the gun shots need to be on beat too, you can't just throw them in at a rough area it should be it has to be one with the beat. If you are talking about squashin haters then be violent, stick to that subject, stop talking too much about yourself it makes you seem full of yourself. It is all about the person you are dissing, you can't make a diss on someone and spend half the rap talking about yourself you say, "hey I am a fucking psyco and I will kill you!" Also it sounds like you are panicing the whole rap. Cut words down, I have a had a few cool raps that I have had to cut syllabols out of so it would flow. It reminds me of a sprinkler system... you know how it goes ch ch ch ch... chchchchchcchchcch, if you can follow that then cool, but that is the only way I can explain it. Just work on it that is all it takes is work. Good Luck with that.
The beat ain't by me man, the gunshots were on the beat, thaz how i got it. An I know what you mean man, thanks for remindin'me it ain't about bragin' when it comes to disses, shit yo how the fuck cud I forget that, I appreciate it alot man. An' I know what ya mean about the sprinkler shit, iz jus so hard striping away ma rhymes cuz I kno how stupid some people are and they need as much explanation as they can get. Apprecaite the great feedback man,
Keep it pimpin'
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